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Wed Jan 30, 2008, 3:48 PM
  • Mood: Tired
  • Listening to: BWV 528
  • Reading: Plato
  • Playing: "Down Under"
  • Eating: Meat
  • Drinking: The occasional Sirah wines, lov'em!
Just thought it was time to get rid of my previous, depressing entry.

So here's a little sonnet I wrote today; though far from optimistic, it's still something. Might post it as a deviation sometime soon. Bonus points for locating quotes and references. Apologies for the excessive alliteration and assonance, I'm still working on those skills relatively intensely.

Sonnet LXII: Filial Faith

I shall end like my father, there’s no doubt:
all tell I lack the touch for ivory;
earth’s springs fail cultivating that proud sprout
of music running through my pedigree.
Nor any pedagogy to contend
shall straighten slants to fluency, but frown;
nor zeal or might or piety would tend
a rope-throw as between the staves I drown –
Nor you who claimed a prodigy within.
What’s starving talent with no fruits to prove?
or pomp of power when I am cursed by kin
and cannot bend with movers to be moved?
My father played piano with a grunt;
in filial faith, my fingers are all blunt.

Yes, Ed, I'm sorry; this is an English sonnet. Though I did move the volta to line 10 for variety...

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  • Current Residence: Ma'ale Gilboa, Israel
  • Interests: Anything of good value
  • Favourite movie: In my Father's Den
  • Favourite band or musician: J.S. Bach and Dire Straits
  • Favourite genre of music: Anything contrapunctal...
  • Favourite artist: MC Escher
  • Favourite poet or writer: WB Yeats
  • Favourite photographer: My anal-about-photography friend Eran
  • Favourite style of art: I think I'm becoming an impressionist
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  • Personal Quote: "All's well that ends" (a Murphy's Law)
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:iconj-mas:
Hello to a fellow Jonathan. Nice work, by the way!

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Clear the Sky
:iconrobsonnet:
Jonathon! I dropped by to see if there was some reason you'd stopped writing, and I discover that you've fallen off my watchlist. I thought you were still there, since I still have some of your old deviations in my inbox awaiting review and comment. Damn dA and the software that controls us all!

A most sincere apology, my friend, for what must have seemed an unconscienable indifference to you and your creative efforts. I am quite honestly swamped with work, as I normally am, but I had no intention of forgetting or ignoring you. Please forgive me.

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Ed
"If you're not confused, you're misinformed." - Tom Clancy
The Trouble with a Love Poem
:iconjmas:
'Tis of little consequence. I barely even post on DA these days - maybe some day if and when I get published we'll see what happens. :-)

My warmest regards.

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"In vain doth valour breed" - Milton
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:iconstillherelove:
:wave:

Care to explain enjambment?

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:iconjmas:
Enjambment is essentially the technique where you don't have a pause at the end of a line (such as a comma or full stop), but where the line breaks in the middle - resulting in a bit of a rushed effect. In freeverse it lets you highlight certain words or phrases. :-)

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"In vain doth valour breed" - Milton
:iconstillherelove:
Alright. I see. Care to give me an example? :D

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:iconjmas:
"It's you, who claim seduction to my pen
And teeming brain and heart, who never did
Yet promised. You, who called my talents hidden
In a tarnished mind..."

These are the beginnings of a sonnet I tried to write this afternoon. Notice how the punctuation tends to be in the middle of the line? That's enjambment.

Also, read the uber-correct and hyper-excellent Wiki article: [link]

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"In vain doth valour breed" - Milton
:iconstillherelove:
:salute: Alright. Thank you for your patience. :)

[PS: They CAPITALIZED e. e. cummings IN THE WIKI ARTICLE!! :ohnoes: :O]

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